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I search for answers
That have been found
I listen for a song
That has no sound
Why must the world
Torment my joyous spirit
I shout simple truths
But no one shall hear it
Even as you turn away
Still I shall sing
Of youthful dreams
On gossamer wings
If you wish to wallow
In useless self doubt
To glare at the world
And shut life out
Why should I stay
And be just like you
When I have hope
For starting anew

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This is a slightly revised poem I did for a class. It was a "make up a poem suddenly and toss it to someone so they can respond" exercise. Here is the response composed by some one named Mike. I changed a word or too to mach my revision. I will probly butcher it further.

Stay with me
Don' leave me. Why?
Stay with me
Until I die
If my life is hell
Yours should be too
For if you leave me
Then what will I do
You want hope
I dont think so
You want to leave me
I wont let you go
You will continue your search
For answers that has been found
You will listen to that horrid song
That has no sound
And here no hope
Will ever dwell
Your stuck with me
I am your hell

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~TinaMaxis Sep 10, 2007  Student Digital Artist
:D You're welcome!
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~TinaMaxis Sep 10, 2007  Student Digital Artist
Both those poems are good... good job..!! :)
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~EnchantedWater Sep 10, 2007  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you soooooo much.
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~maddy39 Sep 10, 2007  Hobbyist Writer
i like it
and the rhyming
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Mood: Overwhelmed ~EnchantedWater Sep 10, 2007  Hobbyist Writer
Wow guys. I just put it up and was reading it to myself to see if I liked it. I feel so happy right now. *snuff* I am having a moment.
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~maddy39 Sep 10, 2007  Hobbyist Writer
lol aww :hug: sweet
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